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jake and the road of detsiny (ff connected)

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« on: May 13, 2010, 07:19:03 am »

Very nice. You may want to seperate the dialogue a little more, since you have dexter and jake talking in the same paragraph and it is semi-hard to follow the dialogue that way. All-in-all, very good :3

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