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The Parasite

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« on: June 02, 2012, 08:21:11 am »

What is this, Men In Black 3? XD

It's good, but you made some sort of time skip that took place over a certain amount of time. You should have put Theo and Hunter's reaction to hearing about the parasite. Not just having them immediately start working.
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