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« Reply #345 on: December 31, 2012, 09:02:20 pm »

epic character and a happy new year to you all! Cheesy
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« Reply #346 on: December 31, 2012, 09:05:44 pm »

Wow! This scene was full of action, it was great Ash! How many more are left in this chapter?
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« Reply #347 on: December 31, 2012, 09:11:50 pm »

That's it for this chapter. On to ALRTF for now.
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« Reply #348 on: December 31, 2012, 09:16:14 pm »

ALSO DOUBLE POST BECAUSE I AM A WILD STEED AND NOBODY CAN TAME ME!

pls don't ban me Alice

1. What did you like about New Propaganda?
2. What did you dislike about New Propaganda? Did you feel anything was weak?
3. Who was your favorite character in New Propaganda?
4. Any suggestions for Fusion Mayhem?
5. What would you rate New Propaganda from a scale of 1 to 10?
6. Do you think Sharpshoot and Sparklebird will ever stop being children and just admit their feelings to one another?
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Alshary Sharpshoot - Rose Terrorangel
Ace Tinybullet - Awesome Busterbullet
Alse Kai - Zoey Sparklebird
Agent Gold Dasher - Alicia Freeangel
Silver Kid - Jazz Doccanyon
Zok Terrorgiant - Carter Angelchampion
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« Reply #349 on: December 31, 2012, 09:23:42 pm »

HAPPY NEW YEAR *bans* jk Tongue

1 - I admire your writing style and how much detail you incorporate while also working with a lot of dialogue.

2 - There are still moments of errors but those are just things that can easily slip into writing by an editor's stance *shrugs* Just figured I'd mention that.

3 - I'm not sure on favorite characters but I did like everyone's portrayal done by you *shrugs*

4 - Don't feel you need to rush anything with Fusion Mayhem; take your time and really build up your story. If you need a break from it, take a break and let the story form itself over time.

5 - Currently, I'd probably rate it a 7.5 or 8.

6 - We shall see Tongue
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« Reply #350 on: December 31, 2012, 09:47:13 pm »

1. The detail that you put into it and how you have developed the characters.

2. There weren't any major problems that needed to be fixed.

3. Like I said before and Alice said now, all of the characters are interesting in their own way and that makes it hard to choose a favorite.

4. None that I can think of right now besides just working on the rest until you feel satisfied.

5. 8, Your fan-fic has improved a lot since you started writing it.

6. I think I'm just going to keep beating you up until something happens. Tongue
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« Reply #351 on: January 01, 2013, 01:08:39 am »

Hey thar. I'm tired and my kegs hurt like hell, and happy New Years!!! Agh

1: iz da best.

2: Action is too close. You need to break off at times, and develop characters.

3: The building named after me. Hahahhhhaaaahahahaahahahahahaaaaaa!!! I don't know.....

4: ......you know what I'm gonna say.

5: like a 8-ish.

6: Yeah probably
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« Reply #352 on: January 04, 2013, 06:59:50 pm »

Thank you for your reviews. I will work these in for the next chapter.
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« Reply #353 on: January 04, 2013, 08:59:10 pm »

Yaaaay
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« Reply #354 on: January 05, 2013, 02:12:56 am »

But that won't be for like another 5 years
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« Reply #355 on: January 05, 2013, 08:32:23 am »

I"ll hold you to that Tongue
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« Reply #356 on: January 08, 2013, 05:02:48 pm »

Sweet. Less work for me.
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« Reply #357 on: January 09, 2013, 04:57:53 pm »

1- Dud3 u lyk sohuld st0p wreaytin an dye 

Really liked it, although not my favorite part so far. The

2- I feel that introducing too many characters at once (The "Fighters" I like to call them) can pin you to the wall.
You either give some too much screen time, or not enough. You have at the moment your protagonist, supportive characters (Freeangel, Zoey, etc,),
their friends, villains, and now sidekicks. It can get out of hand. Still, their characterization in this was great.

3- Shawna fo sho

4- Keep at it

5- 8-ish

6- She's so into you, bra. I'll be your wing man, any time.

While I can't exactly write as eloquently as you, I hope my criticism came across as reasonable.
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« Reply #358 on: January 09, 2013, 05:18:30 pm »

I get what you're saying about introducing too many characters. I had around 4 more on the first draft I left behind in Oregon. But you know, a lot of mangas are like that. These are the characters I'm going to be sticking with for a while though, until we get to more of the big bads.
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Silver Kid - Jazz Doccanyon
Zok Terrorgiant - Carter Angelchampion
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« Reply #359 on: January 09, 2013, 07:29:34 pm »

And you won't implement this for 5 years, was it?
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